Writing Technique: Narrowing focus
at twilight
comes the first snow fall
fawn’s footprints
PR
12/31/15
Inspired by:
amenohiya madakini kurete nemuno hana
A rainy day
Quickly falls the night–
Silk-tree blossoms
(c) Yosa Buson
amenohiya madakini kurete nemuno hana
A rainy day
Quickly falls the night–
Silk-tree blossoms
(c) Yosa Buson
ake yasuki yo wo iso ni yoru kurage kana
the short night ending–
close to the water’s edge
a jellyfish
(c) Yosa Buson
in the moonlight
Wisteria flowers look fragile –
a gust of wind
© Chèvrefeuille
“…Is this “narrowing focus”? I think so. I will try to explain it. “In the moonlight”, far away, high up in the sky; “Wisteria flowers look fragile”, down to earth; “a gust of wind”, that’s very close to the body if you can feel that…”
For Carpe Diem Haiku
thoughts and entanglements 
I am very impressed Pat. You have got me thinking here, another addition to the new year list
“new year list
narrowing focus
a haiku”
Have a happy new year
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LOL!! That works, you’re funny, thank you:))
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Glad for your snow!
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Oh, so very peaceful!
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Beautifully written Pat … nice use of narrowing focus.
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Thank you !!
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