wind starts door creaking
curtains billow through windows
dust from parched earth rise
as gray skies give way, raindrops
clamor – kids on porch with friends
OR
wind starts door creaking
curtains billow through windows
dust from parched earth rise
kids on the porch with their friends
paper boats in hand, pure joy
Pat R
2/22/17
The prompt is
Door& Friend
over at Tanka Tuesday with Colleen
#Tanka Tuesday, #micropoetry, #poetry, #5lines
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These Tanka are like our weather at the moment, lovely, especially appreciated the line of the second one: paper boats in hand, pure joy. 🙂
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Ah, yes. The paper boat bit is something we did as kids, waiting with excitement for puddles to form so we can dash down the steps and set them sailing:) Thanks for stopping by.
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Ahh, that’s lovely. 🙂
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This brings back memories. We always changed into our bathing suits in the summer to go out and play in the rain. (K)
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Ah, that sounds like fun!
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It was!
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I love both of your Tanka’s Pat. Great images form in my mind. I’m ready for spring and your words bring fond memories of summer. ❤
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I’m ready to skip right over spring and go right into summer:) Glad you like them, thanks.
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I agree. I am so ready for spring or summer! LOL! ❤
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Both are very engaging although the second one goes that bit further Pat
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Thank you Denis. The second one feels more like a tanka to me:)
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Marvelous! 🌹🌹 to each individual verse.
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Thank you Dorna:)
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Liked them both, but preferred the second one 🙂
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Me too:) Thank you.
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