A challenge from Victoria over at dVerse is to write an erasure poem this is a form of poetry created by erasing words from an existing text in prose or verse and framing the result on the page as a poem.
Here is my attempt.
give me back my heart
and take the rest
before I go
those wild eyes
never speak so well
woe, woe
I am gone
I cease to love thee
Pat R
10/27/17
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This is where it came from and the link:
Maid of Athens, ere we part,
Give, O, give me back my heart!
Or, since that has left my breast,
Keep it now, and take the rest!
Hear my vow before I go,
Zóë mou, sas ágapo
(My life, I love thee)
By those tresses unconfined,
Wooed by each Ægean wind;
By those lids whose jetty fringe
Kiss thy soft cheeks’ blooming tinge;
By those wild eyes like the roe,
Zóë mou, sas ágapo
(My life, I love thee)
By that lip I long to taste;
By that zone-encircled waist;
By all the token-flowers that tell tell
What words can never speak so well;
By love’s alternate joy and woe, woe,
Zóë mou, sas ágapo
(My life, I love thee)
Maid of Athens! I am gone:
Think of me, sweet! when alone.
Though I fly to Istambol,
Athens holds my heart and soul:
Can I cease to love thee? No! No!
Zóë mou, sas ágapo
(My life, I love thee)
By Lord Byron
I venture to say it won’t be your last time. This was so well done!
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Thanks Beverly, I had so much fun doing this. I think you’re right about it not being the last time. I loved doing it!
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Excellent example of erasure, I think! Love it.
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That was my first time, so much fun. It reminded of Magnetic Poems: )
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It is a bit like magnetic poetry, isn’t it? Proud of you for choosing a complex text from Lord Byron and doing so well with it.
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It did feel like that, only in order. I chose the poem by just opening a book I had laying around and that’s what it opened to. At first I said. Oh boy! But I kept it and went for it anyway;) Glad you like it.
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Nice poem of parting taken from Byron’s.
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Thank you Frank, that was fun:)
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I too love the end result of your erasure poem ~ Speaks well of the woes of love ~
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Ah, yes….thank you Grace:)
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Well done.
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Thank you Ken.
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Bravo! What a beautiful poem hiding in plain sight if we take the time to look!
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Yes, thank you! I feel like a poem hunter:)
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Great example of “found poetry.” Thank you! xoA
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Oh I do love how you almost made Lord Byron’s text into its opposite.
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It did kinda what happened. Right. Thank you Björn.
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this is very cool. something about it reminds me of Shakespeare
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It is kinda written in that ‘old English’ style as the lines a straight from the original poem. Thank you. This was a new try for me with this form of poetry
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You did wonderfully
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Oh, thank you so much : )
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