at the ocean’s edge..
eavesdropping on harmony
of wind and waves – I’m
tucked into their rhythm, that
hypnotic sway sounds like love
Revision:-
at the ocean’s edge
wind and waves move in concert –
as we greet the day
I’m tucked in their rhythm, that
hypnotic sway, such passion
Pat R
2/12/20
For Tanka Tuesday Poetry Challenge over at Colleen’s using synonyms for Love & Harmony
I used “Passion & In Concert” for more responses check here
For some reason I forgot about the ‘synonyms’ part of the challenge.
So I rewrote it and decided to post them both.
Excellent!
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Thanks Ken
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I remember when we slept at the shores of Lake Malawi experiencing what you described through the words of this poem. Beautiful.
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Good to hear it brings back a lovely memory. Thank you๐
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This takes me to a beautiful place. Love it!
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Nice! Thank you๐
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You’re welcome!
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I like both, but especially the first one!! “Tucked into the rhythm of the ocean” sounds like heaven to me ๐ โค
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Thank you. It is!
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In my mind, I live at the beach ๐
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Ah! A good place to live๐
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Last year I went on a crazy spending spree–everything in seashore theme, from wall art to gorgeous tableware. It was a luxury, but I figured “if not now, when?”
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Plus, you can’t take it with you..as my mom is forever saying.
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Exactly!
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The hipnotic spell of the ocean is very enchanting! Love the harmony of wind and waves.
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Thank you. That’s one of my favorite thing to do. Go listen to the waves.
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They are both good but I think I like the first one best. Good job!
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Me too, thank you๐
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You’re welcome. ๐
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I loved both tankas! What beautiful imagery. Well done! ๐ xo
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Thank you Vashti!
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Reblogged this on Where Genres Collide Traci Kenworth YA Author & Book Blogger and commented:
Another good one!
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Thanks for the reblog Traci.
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You’re welcome!
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Both powerful poems Pat but with one changed line very different imagery.
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Thank you, Denis.
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