boisterous creek rushing,
sound of wind through maple leaves
in the arms of nature
Pat R
3/02/16
For Carpe Diem Haiku Prompt: Mirror
This month we are exploring Basho’s way of writing haiku, today’s technique is the ‘comparison’ technique explained as follows,
“…In the words of Betty Drevniok: “In haiku the SOMETHING and the SOMETHING ELSE are set down together in clearly stated images. Together they complete and fulfill each other as ONE PARTICULAR EVENT.” She rather leaves the reader to understand that the idea of comparison is showing how two different things are similar or share similar aspects…”
Im’ not sure I got it but there it is:)
For further reading on this haiku writing technique follow the link below
Nicely done!
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Thanks Janice:)
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really like the phrase ‘in the arms of nature”
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Thank you Candy:)
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A wonderful haiku Pat. I have to say this is one of your best haiku I have read. And in this you have used in a very delicate way the comparison technique. I had to read and re-read this haiku to find it. So well done!
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As I was tweaking it the suttle comparison revealed itself. My original thought had the leaves still on the tree rustling in the wind. Then I realized it could be fall with the autumn wind chasing fallen leaves, this creates it’s own type of uproar which could be likened to the running of the boisterous creek. It worked out well then. Thank you for your kind comment and for taking the time:)..it’s all due to your hard work..:)
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I enjoy what I do and i do it with love
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That you surely do 🙂
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Well penned ! The sound of wind and the and the boisterous creek are aptly put together making it ” at a particular event ” !
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Thank you Milan:)
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Welcome !
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Pl have a look at my post of the same
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A lovely post Pat .. nicely done!
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Thank you, glad you like it:)
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So nice. I love the feeling it gave me!
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Thank you..
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You’re welcome!
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